English 1 wrote:
But it really IS a terrible piece of writing. The commenter's post is just normal no-caps MB-speak, but the article is painfully overwritten and ungrammatical:
"The trenches of adversity foster bonds with ungodly strength. Factor in blood relation, and the magnitude of the strength flourishes."
"And then his timid, nervous posture snaps and with it the corner of his mouth reaches his eyes."
"Though, regardless of when it began, thereâ€™s aspects cemented into his brain. Like the father figure he never had, and the high school coach which, whether intentional or not, slid into that role."
This kind of language very rarely gets into print. It's far from surprising that someone would point out its conspicuous poor quality. The author is probably a student; I'm wondering where the school paper's editor was when that issue was being put together.
It's true, it is poorly written.
But so was "Once a Runner," and I still thought it was a good story. I saw this on Facebook earlier today, always good to hear about a positive story in our sport. Kid is working hard and improving, good for him.
Meanwhile, some student at smc is doing the same thing: working hard and trying to improve. Progress doesn't come overnight. Just like his classmate on the cross country team, he isn't the best in the nation, but they're both doing their best and (presumably both) improving over time at what they are passionate about.