Shawn H wrote:
his eireness wrote:1) No need for the aside on what a fibula is - if the reader doesn't know they will research it.
2) No caged bird analogies Shawn Angelou
Thanks, his eireness. But unfortunately not all readers are as knowledeable as some of us are about anatomy. Would you believe that there are beginning runners who don't even know what a shinsplint is? As for the caged bird analogies, I originally chose caged warthog, but somehow it just didn't work as well. LOL. As I recall Stephen King said, and I paraphrase, there are no new stories, but simply the same stories told a different way.
Yes, I would believe it. Do you think I'm oblivious to people outside of running, or to beginning runners? You can't define every running or anatomically specific piece of your writing - the onus is on the reader to educate themselves for terms they don't understand. For instance, you didn't define stress fracture, and that was appropriate.
We just aren't to agree on the 2nd point. There is a difference between an interesting new spin on a metaphor vs. merely using different wording.
But it's all subjective. Those were my humble thoughts on first pass.